Inspiration

I've actually been paying a lot of attention to the news, etc. lately, but haven't had the chance to write about it because there's so much to read. However, I have been working on a new song called "We the People" that was inspired by the Tea Party movement and other events. I already have some lyrics and guitar riffs worked out, and it's probably the fastest and thrashiest song I've ever written.

Because I'm so generous, I'm giving you a sneak preview of the chorus lyrics as they stand now (I'm hoping to improve on them later), as well as a MIDI version of the music I have so far (I can't record guitar at the moment because all but one of my instrument cables broke, and I need at least two for recording). As always, constructive criticism is welcome.

First, the music. This starts off with a double verse (I haven't written an intro yet), then goes into the pre-chorus, then the chorus, then a single verse, pre-chorus, and chorus again:

We the People (sample)

And here's the chorus as it stands now. Like I said, I think it can be better, but I'd like to stay with this idea:

Of, by, and for, the people have spoken
Held down no more, our silence is broken
You can't ignore the beast you've created
Change is in store, and you won't escape it

Thoughts?